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    A psychologist is one of the social professions. Its purpose is to treat someone’s soul as a physician treats someone’s body. There is something common between these two professions.
    Speaking of advantages of this profession, first and foremost I want to say about a great opportunity of self-knowledge. In process of studying psychology, you always find something out about your mood, mode, thinking and you can learn to understand why you do this or that action. Another advantage is a quiet future work — the most psychologists work in a warm and comfort premises.
    Disadvantages are that it is hard to find a well-paid job of psychologist in Russia. Our country just begins to develop a psychology service; all government vacancies are underpaid and the most of private psychologist aren’t popular and don’t have a proper demand.
    So, psychologist — is a work for your soul but not for your money.

  • 1. In process of studying psychology - перед процесс нужен артикль а, process is a countable noun: In a process of studying psychology,...
    2. Another advantage is a quiet future work "work" -неисчисляемое существительное. Либо убрать артикль а, либо заменить work на job. Я бы выбрала второе, больше подходит по контексту. В этом же предложении заменила бы тира на двоеточие и убрала the перед most psychologists
    3. and the most of private psychologist aren’t popular and don’t have a proper demand - "the" перед most надо убрать: all government vacancies are underpaid and most of private psychologist aren’t popular and don’t have a proper demand.
    4. So, psychologist — is a work for your soul but not for your money. - зачем тире? Это в русском тире надо когда подлежащее и сказуемое существительные, в английском есть глагол is.

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