Описание графиков

  • Здравствуйте,
    нужна помощь в описании графика.

    Я начал так:
    The chart illustrates comparing the health risks faced by males and females, made by WHO in 2004. The vertical axis shows diseases

    The horizontal axis represents a percent of total deaths

    it can be seen the main reason that leads to death among males and females is Cardiovascular disease, by the female is the number about by the male is less than a third percent.

    Как продолжить? Что писать то нужно?