could you cheak grammar?

  • Hi
    может как то по красивее можно написать предложения
    Compared to people's life in the past where people lived in the community to survive, nowadays, people's life is protected, comfortable, numerous people are pursuing the aim of having financial independent
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  • .... pursuing the aim of having financial independen---...the aim of having financial independence или the aim of being financially independent.

    ---В общем нормальное предложение. Я бы перед to survive вставил just, после nowadays убрал запятую и перед numerous поставил and.

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    Compared to people's life in the past where people lived in the community just to survive, nowadays people's life is protected, comfortable and numerous people are pursuing the aim of being financially independent